Treatment of Sound: Going Crazy (Revision of Waiting)

Brainstorm//Logline: It's just another day in class, until a kid starts to notice the sounds in the classroom...

Treatment:
Riiiiiiiiiiiiiiinnggg
Establishing shot of classroom as the kids pile in. 
Thumpthump ziiiip 
And abundance of sounds and close ups of actions as the class gets settled in 
Cut to wide shot of class sitting, bored, waiting.

Tick. Tick. Tick. Tick.

Cut to image of a clock as it clicks away.

Teacher speaks to class

We see the teacher starting to teach the class. 

Cut to waist shot of a boy whose already falling asleep, and lays his head on his desk.

Cut to ECU of boy sleeping.

Taptaptap.

We see pencil tapping, zoom out to see a bored student sitting at her desk looking at something in the distance

Cut back to ECU of sleeping boy; eyes twitch.

Siiiiiiiigh. (stops, and discontinues) 

A frowning mouth, zooms out to a waist shot bored boy who slumps down in his seat

Patpatpatpatpat.

Zoom out more to see the bored boy tapping his heel.

Boy's eye's twitch more

ZzZzZzZzZz

A boy with his head down sleeping, arms stretched out, hands hanging off the edge of his desk, snoring semi-loudly.

Cut back to ECU of boy; purses his lips and frowns.

Indiscriminate talking about a lesson

The back of a teacher as he moved back and forth from looking at the class, writing on the board, and reading off her notes

Clickclackclickclackclickclack

A phone zooms out to a girl secretly texting during class. "This class is killing me, I want it to end :["

Scribble scribble

The tip of a writing pen zooms out to a boy drawing the teacher in a funn
When will this class be over...
This is so boring.
ECU's of people turning to their classmates and whispering to each other

Cut back to Sleeping boy. Gets angry and sits up.

Waist shot of boy; frustrated by all the sounds. Sits there, looking around.

Tick. Tick. Tick. Tick.

Taptaptap.

Patpatpatpatpat.

ZzZzZzZzZz

Indiscriminate talking about a lesson

Clickclackclickclackclickclack

Scribble scribble

classmate's whispering

Zoom on frame of Boy gets tighter and tighter between each sound. Each picture to each sound is shown respectively as the frame gets tighter and tighter around the boys searching eyes. Sounds get louder and louder.

Sound Montage of all the sounds together loudly

We see the boys eyes shut tightly--maybe he's even sweating--trying to ignore the sounds as they get louder

SLAM--SCREECH all other noises but ticking and snoring stop. Ticking is almost near silent, and snoring is obnoxious but only heard once after long silence.

Wide shot of classroom. Boy stands up, slamming his desk, breathing heavily. Everyone around him is looking at him: Close ups of each "sound maker," ending with the snoring boy whom we hear snoring, and cutting back to wide shot.

I CAN'T TAKE IT ANYMORE!!! 

Boy screams and runs out off frame of Wide shot. Everyone is frozen. Teacher resumes teaching, and everyone else goes back to their business. 

Tick. Tick. Tick. Tick.-->mesh of other sounds snoring slowly subsiding.

We see the clock, and as the ticking progresses the other sounds join in with respective images. As they begin to do so, cut to waist of sleeping boy, slowly panning in. 

Mesh of sounds slowly gets louder--> Tick. Tick. Tick. Tick. (With echo)

ECU of snoring boy(not snoring anymore) slow zoom in, as the sounds mesh into a low ambience and ticking of clock gets louder. On last, significantly drawn out and loud tick, eyes suddenly open. Quick Fade to Black.

Treatment of Sound: Waiting For It To End.

Brainstorm//Logline: Just another day in class--waiting for it to end because time is just too slow when you want out.

Treatment:(The sounds add onto each other as they progress.)

Tick. Tick. Tick. Tick.

We see the image of a clock as it clicks away.

Taptaptap.

We see pencil tapping, zoom out to see a bored student sitting at her desk looking at something in the distance

Siiiiiiiigh. (stops, and discontinues) 

A frowning mouth, zooms out to a waist shot bored boy who slumps down in his seat

Patpatpatpatpat.

Zoom out more to see the bored boy tapping his heel.

ZzZzZzZzZz

A boy with his head down sleeping, arms stretched out, hands hanging off the edge of his desk

Indiscriminate talking about a lesson

The back of a teacher as he moved back and forth from looking at the class, writing on the board, and reading off her notes

Clickclackclickclackclickclack

A phone zooms out to a girl secretly texting during class. "This class is killing me, I want it to end :["

Scribble scribble

The tip of a writing pen zooms out to a boy drawing the teacher in a funn
When will this class be over...
This is so boring.
ECU's of people turning to their classmates and whispering to each other

Noises blend into silence. Tick. Tick. Tick. Ding. ding. Ding.

You see the class as a whole. Then back to the clock. The five minute bell rings. The teacher looks at the clock, and starts wrapping up her lesson.

Cli-click

Pen stops writing and is put away, along with the other school materials.

Fwip

Phone is flipped down and put on desk as she puts her stuff away

Yaaaaaaaawn

Sleeping boy wakes up and stretches his arms out.

Screech (short)

The boy stops tapping his heel and sit up, putting stuff away, smiling.

Click Tap

Pencil is flipped around, led put away, and is tucked into backpack.

Abundance of zips

Montage of backpacks being zipped up

Tick. Tick. Tick. Tick.

Goes from clock, to teacher, to each student in the class with anticipation on their faces, each shown differently.

Come on come on….patpatpat

Impatient boy leans over his desk and backpack tapping his heel again

taptaptap

Pencil tapping girl starts tapping her fingers

Clench

Girl grips her phone in anticipation

What are you going to do after school?

When is formal again?

The 11^th

What color are you wearing?

I like your shoes!

I got them on sale!

Can I copy your notes?

Sure...

ECU of mouths of people around  the classroom talking.

Hurry Up. Come On. Why is this taking so looong… I want to go home.

Tapping of heel, fingers, and grips, eyes looking at the clock, checking watches all montaged together

Sounds come together and gets softer as ticking gets louder

Shot of clock gets closer and closer in sudden zooms in synch with ticking

Silence. Riiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiing

Abundance of screeching and footsteps and Yes’s and FINALLY’s come together and mesh into crowd noises.

Worm shots of chairs moving, feet stepping, Smiling faces, grabbing backpacks, and students filing out the door.

Silence. Slow swish and lock.

Students disappear from door frame as the door slowly closes and shuts.

Short silence. Until—tick. Tick. Tick. Tick.

On last tick cut to black.

Why This Works:
From the beginning scene and abundance of noises we can tell that these are bored students in class, and they just want to get out, emphasized by the text and dialogue between the classmates. Many of the sounds are foley sounds, and the ticking and some select sounds will be used as sound bridges between transitions. Some characters have a set of noises associated with them (tapping of the heel, tapping of fingers/pen, etc) And that's pretty much all we needed. It's simply just a story of the agony in waiting for class to end. I might even add funny unrealistic scenes like moving from the shot of the teacher lecturing, and cutting back to the class as skeletons. But that's pretty unrealistic to do so I'll just have to think of more things to emphasize the long wait.